His name was Shadow

Shadow

So today I am doing the d’verse challenge, with word shadow as the prompt – rules include: 14 lines, 10 syllables (English Italian or French rhyme form), to start each line with the same word you end with (derivatives and homophones allowed), use the notion of shadow as your metaphor or reality somewhere in your poem.

They have also noted the use of iambic pentameter as a side challenge to this.

The derivative in this was for nor and used as ignores – the rhyme nors with homophone gnaws

I hope this works for the reader…

Holm passed, a shadow he ebbed into home
Preys on weak, feline decorum I praise
Rome languid, stretch high the darkness will roam
Rays of light, do detract renounce and raze

Pause ones mind from thantoms of claws and paws
Graze on land in wildlife in hues of greys
Gnaws upon ones fright hinders or ignores
Phase starts so young forever now will faze

Heal shadows of war capricious to heel
Daze the minds are prowling around the days
Reel vicarious near, daylight real
Lays on floorboards or sides do aught but laze

Khol silhouette in place is filled with coal
Hole dug he pronto leapt completely whole

SammiScribbles word 12/02/2022 – capricious (54 words but due to using d’verse challenge this is not possible with 14 lines 10 syllables a line)

https://wp.me/p4hb99-1wK

FOWC - Fandango words of the day 
vicariously 09/02/2022 renounce 10/02/2022
pronto 11/02/2022

https://wp.me/p8ImEX-hnf

https://wp.me/p8ImEX-hnE

https://wp.me/p8ImEX-hnH

D’verse challenge 10/02/2022 – Shadow

https://wp.me/p1GTyJ-69T

Now personal preference, I do not like starting and ending words being the same. This is too repetitive for my taste so I will be looking at using homophones where possible. Iambic parameter on the other hand I do love to read out a poem to get a sound. But doing so on the same words is not my preference especially when it is up to the reader to determine the stress on the wording unless they have heard it.

Whilst using the homophones I originally thought how is it possible to include iambic parameter to stress the first and last word coherently but after a bit of reflection it is possible although likely unwise. You would have to be careful of the un/stressed use of the words being the same or that the word you use at the end of the sentence if derivatives are used as some would not make them a derivative of the homophones.

If for example I use the word home as the last word and the homophone being holm (aka the flat ground by a river) as my first word. Now the last word would need to be stressed aka hoMe. Now as a noun this has potential to be stressed on its own but not a hard stress on the wording. But if I used the derivatives of home it would then not match with the homophones of holm. As holm being at the start i would need to stress this word too or not at all.

Now if i used a derivative and I change the word to homebound, townhome etc using holm at the start – it would be subject to interpretation on whether this has been achieved (and up to the reader to decide if I should have used just the derivative and no homophones or vice versa. I.e. if I should have just used home at the start and home at the end.)

Therefore, I think iambic pentameter as well as the start and last word being the same should not be used in conjunction with each other – I have however given it a go whilst trying to use homophones. This has also meant the derivative is sometimes needed for the iambic pentameter. Add on a rhyme of English French or Italian- AABB, ABBA etc and you are left with quite a conundrum on trying to get the sentence and poem making sense. Sometimes I think too many rules can constrain other times open up potential for creative thought. So I apologise if the poem above is not easy to follow or if the iambic pentameter is sometimes lost.

18 responses to “His name was Shadow”

  1. you made such good use of Shadow/shadows as well as homophones
    “Khol silhouette in place is filled with coal”
    these are encouraged in shadow sonnets – it adds a word playfulness to a somewhat demanding style but iambic pentameter is not required, no doubt because of the difficulties you found.
    I like your critique too ” I think too many rules can constrain other times open up potential for creative thought” so thank you for joining the prompt

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    1. Thank you for setting the task, it was not an easy one but did push boundaries to try and acheive (even if at times not quite right) the challenge it presented was fun ๐Ÿ˜Š

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      1. and thank you for taking such a refreshingly positive approach

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  2. You did great dear โค๏ธ

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    1. Thank you โค very appreciated

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      1. You are most welcome

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  3. I love how you made it look easy, and such a great tribute to a cat.

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    1. Thank you โค

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  4. love your use of homophones, very clever writing … nice to meet you! And welcome to d’Verse ๐Ÿ™‚

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    1. Thank you so much โค and a pleasure to meet you also

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      1. looks like we will have a good debate on your royalty ๐Ÿ™‚

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    2. A controversial topic so will always open up debate… some will not like her for reasons of Diana… some the way the monarchy is run and portrayed. Can be others like me who just think Charles wants his birthright so badly he will not act out or try not to displease and like yourself just think its a indoctrination of the system ๐Ÿ˜ (always good to see people’s point of view on it)

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      1. a system that has no real function … except waste of big bucks ๐Ÿ™‚

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      2. Hmmm one function they do keep heritage sites out of government hands who will sell it off ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ๐Ÿคฃ

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      3. lol piss poor excuse for existence if you ask me ๐Ÿ™‚

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  5. I missed that we could use homophones! Very nice!

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    1. Thank you ๐Ÿ˜Š I probably would have missed it too if I was not trying to find a way I could change the challenge to not use the same word. X

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  6. Wow.. Great.. Well done.. ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ๐Ÿ˜Š๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿผ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿผ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿผ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿผ..

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